Writing essay

I need to change the thesis so that it doupesnt talk about M and Marie's personalities and talks about how their relationship isolates them instead. Here goes an attempt at the first body.

Marie and Mersault match the stereotype of a man and a woman in love, display the traditional relationship emotions toward each other, and spend time together like other couples; however, these very things that make them normal also isolate them because no other love-based relationships in the book are like theirs. Marie expresses her emotions toward Mersault a few times in the book, and they are what you'd expect her to feel given their relationship. In chapter five, Marie "mumbled that [Mersault] was peculiar, that that was probably why she loved [him]" (50-51). Normal relationships work in that exact way: the two partners love each other because of their peculiarities. When their relationship is forced to end, Mersault presents the typical degradation of love that one would expect from a human with a broken heart. "Salamano’s dog was worth just as much as his wife. The little robot woman was just as guilty as the Parisian woman Masson married, or as Marie, who had wanted me to marry her. What did it matter that Raymond was as much my friend as Céleste, who was worth a lot more than him? What did it matter that Marie now offered her lips to a new Meursault?" (128). Mersault and Marie's love meets the norm almost exactly, even in its death. However, that very fact separates them from the rest of the world. Salamo loves his dog, but he beats it and treats it horribly. Masson loves his wife, but he's a drunk and doesn't spend much time with her. Raymond feels strongly for Celeste but he beats her and is a pimp. The old man and maman loved each other but they didn't get married or show their love to the world. So really, by being exactly what one would expect, Marie and Mersault's relationship makes them unique in society, and thus outsiders.

Intro paragraph

I know it's a little late, but I was at heritage so I couldn't do this until now,

My question is: assess the social consequences of Mersault's relationship with Marie (be sure to mention being an outsider in your response).

Albert Camus's The Stranger, written in 1942, depicts the life of Mersault; a man outcast by society because of his indifference and his hatred of socializing. In the book, Mersault begins a relationship with Marie, a former coworker who loves him more and more as their relationship progresses. Their love story is the stereotypical one with a noncommittal man, a woman who is deeper in love than her partner, and a promise of marriage. However, their relationship still makes them strangers in society. Marie and Mersault's unique personalities and their fulfillment of the relationship stereotype make them different from normal people, thus leading to their social ostracism.

Obviously, this intro and thesis is a work in progress and I'm sure I will edit it more. I wrote it in a hurry so I will definitely need to change it.

Narrowing down essay

Why their relationship is normal: the emotions he expresses, their first date. Why what makes them normal also makes them outsiders: the paragraph about love toward the end, the other relationships, the prison visit, the timing of their first date.
How their relationship actively outcasts them: the prosecution about his relationship, the little world they get into when they're near each other, how their engagement was not really consensual or confirmed, the paragraph toward the end about how their relationship is meaningless when they are not cop lose, and how he never says that he loves her, only that he luste for her.
Obviously, I will not include all of these, but I'm helping myself narrow things down. I have already posted a draft of my thesis. I will work on its structure and wording when I 'm writing the first paragraph so it will fit with the paragraph and the essay.

Essay outline

So I've already posted my question and my thesis, so here's my outline.
Intro
Thesis

Paragraph about how Marie and Mersault's love is traditional. Start with something like their traditional male-female emotional, mutually exclusive, and physical relationship makes mersault and Marie the opposite of outsiders. I will end it with a point about how all of the other relationships in the book are "abnormal" so Marie and mersault are actually outcasts.

Then a paragraph about how their relationship alienates them from the rest of the world/makes them appear abnormal. I'll say something like Marie and Mersault's love is strange and unique, which makes them seen as weird by society. I'll include quotes about the prison, the beaches, the courthouse, and anything else I can think of.

Then I will write a conclusion about how a normal thing makes them outcasts and how Camus gives his story a message without loading his language. Boom

Camus 44-80

I didn't know if I had to do this because I was gone but whatever I'm doing it to be safe. So from 44-80 the book was good. The nature of the writing largely remained on course, one question that kept popping up in my mind was whether or not M would break or start showing extremes of emotion. I know he won't, but I still have hope. Okay that's enough blogging for today.

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I just finished reading to page 104. It's a good story. Here's my question for the essay: how does Marie and M's love make him both normal and an outsider? My general thesis will be that because he loves a gupirl in to the traditional way and planned on marrying her, he was like all other men. But, the nature of their relationship is weird and gets attention so it also makes him an outsider,

Camus to page 44

So I read to page 44 (or so) in The Stranger. It was good. So far Meursault has been to his mother's funeral, "saw" a former lover, had dinner with a neighbor and went back to work (I think). I sense something looming on the horizon. Either he will kill himself or he will do something bad and wont know why he did it.
I think he might kill himself because he's dejected, he's been hanging around with bad people, he's been in a haze and he doesn't have a good, reliant friend or relative. Also, from all the books I've read, his writing/speech pattern matches those of characters who have committed suicide.
For those same reasons, he might commit a crime for no apparent reason. He needs to let out his emotions and remain an outsider and repress all of that relationship stuff, so he will harm someone.
But that's just what I think. Maybe he will continue what he's been doing and it will just be how he deals (or doesn't deal) with his emotions. Or maybe there will be some unexpected plot twist that comes way out of the blue. These 44 pages were set-up, we will find out what happens as we move forward.

Comparing the writing styles of Conrad, Kafka, and Camus

Conrad Kafka and Camus represent the high, medium, and low ranges (respectively) of loaded writing. What do I mean by loaded writing? Loaded writhing, for me, is when an author loads his words with themes, metaphors, images, motifs, etc. instead of just narrating a story. These varying concentrations of loaded writing parallel the authors' respective attitudes towards the stories. Marlow cares deeply about the goings on in africa, but he cannot express his distaste for European imperialism outright. So he loads his language and writes sentences like "the word ivory would ring in the air for a while-and in we went into the silence, along empty reaches, round the still bends, between the high wallsof out winding way, reverberating in the hollow claps the ponderous beat of the stern-wheel."
Gregor cares about his situation very much (because he's been turned into a bug). So, he includes both loaded language, obvious motifs and vivid images. A good example of this is when Gregor watches his family through a crack in the door (I did not include a quote because I'm short on time and lazy). Basically, he makes vivid images with emotional details that, when read in to, reveal more about the average German family, industrialized, Europe, and the dehumanization of the worker. Gregor cares, so he loads his language a little bit accompanied by obvious messages.

Camus doesn't load his language at all. He just describes the world as he sees it. Yes, he uses detached phrasing and language to mirror his detachment, but the story truly speaks for itself without the help of specific language. This is what a man does in the wake of his mothers death. The fact that he tells his boss he will take off two days even though he meant the weekend shows the post-loss delirium. His encounter with his coworker shows that he can forget about his moms death readily and cares more about his base urges than his emotions. Really, camus does such a good job crafting his story that he doesn't need to load his language.